#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRYCHALLENGE #254 @SyllabicPoetry @ColleenChesebro #SpecificForm #Tanka

Hi everyone! Today, I’ve joined Colleen’s weekly TankaTuesday challenge, which asks for a Tanka Prose.

You can find Colleen’s post HERE.

I wanted to bracket my prose paragraph with a Tanka either side. It’s entitled:

PAINSTAKING 

Tanka poems in circles

When you feel grumpy

For no obvious reason 

You try to cajole 

Yourself to a better mood

Stuck with codeine hangover 

 

In the dark of night, when you cannot sleep, and the pain finds creative ways to heighten the torture, you sometimes seek relief in medication. Even while knowing the morning will bring a headache and regret. For hours, you’ve held out. Remained stubborn. Eventually, you cave. … was it worth it? Having written this poem, I felt it would work better in a circle. We all know that relentless merry-go-round, I’m sure. Where you want to get off, but it spins too fast, the horse leaps too high, and you struggle to make the leap.

 

The merry-go-round

Relentless pointless ceaseless 

Excruciating 

Agonised muscles and nerves

Stop you from making the leap

Tanka poems in circles

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wildchild47

Chronic pain totally sucks. Big boulders. Rocks. *sigh* …. and it’s just incredible how much energy it drains/saps/zaps – it’s such an emotional toll ….. and yeah, we sit and cajole, give ourselves “pep” talks – try to be “reasonable” – make excuses, apologies, “try to be better” or more positive …. and it’s like no matter how “responsible” we are, for all the efforts to “make lifestyle changes” – be … whatever …. pro-active …. in the end, the pain wins. I swear, in my own personal experience, it becomes such a crazy cycle, cruel and vicious – there… Read more »

Yvette M Calleiro

The circle makes perfect sense for both of them. Well done, Harmony! 🙂

Kerfe

That medicine circle is hard to break out of. Sometimes it’s necessary though. Those are perfect representations of the way pain envelops us.

Colleen

Harmony, I think your tanka prose is most expressive. I love the use of the circle, as in Zen imagery, representing your “eternal pain.” (How did you get the words into a circle? Asking for a poetic friend. LOL!) I’m sending you healing energy… chronic pain is debilitating. I hope you are on the mend. <3

Diana Peach

That was so cool, Harmony. I love the way you structured the poem. And heartwrenching. My husband deals with chronic pain, and it’s so hard on him. I hope you’re finding some relief. <3

Balroop Singh

What a presentation Harmony! Pain goes like that in circles. Lovely poetry.

Roberta Eaton Cheadle

These poems express your pain and discomfort very vividly, Harmony.

D.L. Finn

I love the words in a circle just like those nights when the pain, mentally or physically take over and the moment only goes on without going forward.

Miriam Hurdle

I liked the way you presented these poems, Harmony. It’s so creative. I have nerve damage from the chemo, so I take meds to calm my nerve, otherwise, I wouldn’t be able to sleep at all. Another med is for high blood pressure. That’s no way around it.

CS Boyack

Very cool way of expressing your situation.

Joan Hall

I avoid taking medicine when at all possible, but as Staci said, sometimes it’s necessary. Sorry about the hangover. But you made the most of it. I like the circles!

Laura

The circle is amazing, Harmony – so very creative. My own addiction is sleeping tablets to help mask the constant pain. I’m not sure what’s worse. I’ve given up worrying about it. 😉

Jules

Very cleverly done! Many years ago I had a slipped disc in my neck…
There is just no way to get any comfort. Thankfully physical therapy worked wonders!

Priscilla Bettis

Merry-go-round types of feelings and situations just call for a circular poem, but I’d never thought to do it. Brilliant, Harmony!

Molly Shea

Feel better soon. I loved your poems and that wonderful circle.

Gwen Plano

Health crises take every bit of our emotional and physical strength. You inspire me, dear Harmony, with your courage — and your creativity. 💖 Powerful response to the prompt!

John Howell

The circles were creative, Harmony. I sure hope you feel better. I’ve had those hangovers and they are not fun.

Jan Sikes

Very creative, Harmony. The poems are powerful, but putting them into the circle takes them to a different energetic level. Great job!

Kymber Hawke

Your circles are amazing! I’ve never seen this poetry challenge before, but you did a terrific job!

Staci Troilo

I try to avoid taking medication, too, but sometimes we just have to. I’m sorry you aren’t feeling well. I hope you feel better soon. (I liked the circles, by the way.)