#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRYCHALLENGE #258 @SyllabicPoetry @ColleenChesebro #ThemePrompt #Etheree

Hi everyone! πŸ™‚

Today, I’ve joined Colleen’s weekly TankaTuesday challenge, which asks for poem based on the concepts of Memories:Β Sweet and Sour. I’ve written a stacked (or double) Etheree, which has ten lines in each stack in the following syllable count … 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10-10-9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1.

You can find Colleen’s post HERE.

 

 

Entitled: New Girl on the Block

 

Wine

Fine talk

Company

Led to believe

We were best of friends

Spent most days together

Found a lot of common ground

Drawn into the inner circle

We five went on summer holiday

Wine, loose lips, destroyed any illusion

Shocked, even your oldest friend gaped askance

Could you truly mean what you had said

To the strangers sat next to us

When asked how we had each met

Pity the disabled

Unattached woman

Faith undermined

Truth from drink

Fine talk

That

 

I hope you enjoyed this double Etheree. I tried to explore the sweet in the first half, and the sour in the second, and overall, take a look at how friendships are not always what they seem.

Have a lovely day! πŸ™‚

 

Β© Harmony Kent 2022

 

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theindieshe

Found the episode so true and relatable!
Awesome attempt!

Colleen

Oh, man!! I know how this feels! It’s almost like a betrayal, don’t you think? Hugs to you, Harmony. <3

Selma Martin

This combination exists. You wrote a great likeness of some people I know. Just so good. Thanks for sharing. xo

Jules

I have found through the years there are those I can, and those I cannot trust.
I attempt to say far away from those with ‘loose lips’. πŸ™‚

CS Boyack

I’ve known people like that.

Miriam Hurdle

Your poem portraited the theme perfectly, Harmony. How sad when the sweetness of the friendship turned sour when betrayed. It’s powerful and well done.

Diana Peach

You did a wonderful job with the prompt, Harmony. That was creative how you divided the sweet from the sour. It left the poem with a clear sense of disillusionment with that friendship. Not everyone is who they seem. πŸ™

Yvette M Calleiro

Fantastic, Harmony! It’s funny how friendship can seem so perfect until they aren’t. πŸ™‚

Mar

Well done as always, Harmony.

D.L. Finn

Good show of what friendship is and isn’t. I think we all have known someone like that in our lifetime. Loved this Harmony and it made me mad at that person πŸ™‚

Roberta Eaton Cheadle

I think this is very good, Harmony. I know people exactly like this.

Ken Gierke

Some lessons are harder than others. Well done.

DGKaye

Well done Harmony! <3

Gwen Plano

What a powerful journey! The hopes and dreams — and then the reality. Fantastic take on the prompt, Harmony. πŸ€—πŸ’•

Veera

A powerful pair of etherees. It is sad when you find out your friends aren’t true friends… πŸ™

Anonymous

i found this poem to be very powerful and filled with honesty. Thank you for sharing.

Annette R Aben

Wham, bam! You penned quite the stirring piece here, Harmony. Well done you.

Jan Sikes

Whoa! Incredible, Harmony. From the highs to the lows. Great job!

Priscilla Bettis

The sour part hurts! It’s hard to find genuine people/friends, but when we do, they’re precious!

Staci Troilo

It’s a shame not all friendships can be trusted. Powerful stuff, Harmony. Sad, but poignant.

John Howell

Wow, Harmony. It’s like we were there and couldn’t un-hear what was said. Terrific.