#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRYCHALLENGE #251 @SyllabicPoetry @ColleenChesebro #Cinquain #ButterflyCinquain

Hi everyone! Today, I’ve joined Colleen’s weekly TankaTuesday challenge, which asks for a butterfly cinquain on the theme of “Taste the Rainbow”. Pat (wildchild47) chose this week’s theme. Unfortunately, Pat’s websites are all deleted. I sure hope she’s okay.

You can find Colleen’s post HERE.

A butterfly cinquain has the following syllable format: 2-4-6-8-2-8-6-4-2

Enough

My poem is dark this week. Don’t ask why … I’m sitting here smiling! Although, I am sporting a few bruises … self-inflicted due to being extra clumsy lately! Perhaps that’s where my muse is sitting! 😉

Bruised sky with red clouds
Image courtesy of Laura Vinck via Unsplash

Legion

The many hues

Of Bruises which scar skin

The metallic taste of crimson

Of fog

Of rage of hurt of heart broken

Of dawn full of tumult

Resolution 

No more

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theindieshe

Story of grit summed up so beautifully

wildchild47

The colours add the effect and drama to the piece, it’s an explosion, like a bruise blossoming and it’s so evocative, it’s great. I don’t think it’s “dark” – rather a balance – because the ending could be read as being full of determination or different choices, too. So all in all, it’s working very well. Enough details and yet a certain ambiguity left to us. 🙂 And hey, what’s wrong with writing “dark”? LOL ….. You have to wade into the harder things, issues, feelings, etc. it in order to find the “turn” – the light, the hope, the… Read more »

JulesPaige

Many years ago I did the old step on the rake and got the pole right between my eyes…
I try not to be clumsy… but sometimes I rush.
Bruises have rainbow colors especially when they are healing!
Soaking in epsom salts help me… Heal quickly 🙂 ~Jules

D.L. Finn

Powerful poem, Harmony, and a great picture to go along with it. The sky does look bruised and sorry for all yours! The metallic taste of crimson is such a great image and I could almost taste it.

D.L. Finn

I didn’t mean image, I meant line…lol.

Elizabeth

Oh, bruises no! I can feel how angry you are. Strong poem! Hope you get better soon.

D. Avery

Yes, colorfully dark. It pulses with color. “The metallic taste of crimson”… good stuff.

CS Boyack

I’m not a poetry guy, but I like this one.

Joan Hall

You say its dark, but I also see hope, strength, and determination. Well done, Harmony!

Yvette M Calleiro

I love the poem, Harmony! Bruised but not broken. Well done! 🙂

Jacquie Biggar

You told a story in just a few, powerfully spoken words. I get a sense of strength and determination from this- well said!

John Howell

This is a terrific poem that is full of emotion. It is the kind of poem that is visceral. Well done, Harmony.

Staci Troilo

Well, you know me, Harmz. I like it when things go dark. And I loved this one. Nicely done.

Sorry you’ve been clumsy lately, though.

Jan Sikes

This poem is powerful, Harmony. It is dark but honest and that comes through! Great job!

Priscilla Bettis

I think your poem is strong and fabulous rather than dark. The speaker sounds resolute in his or her decision to move forward.

Wow, that image is beautiful.

Gwen Plano

Powerful writing, Harmony. I could taste the color, feel its impact. “no more” – perfect! 💗

Sarah Brentyn

Beautifully dark. I love it! (I’m sure you’re surprised.) 😉 💖

Roberta Eaton Cheadle

This is dark, Harmony, but it is very good.

Colleen

I love using a color in poetry! Well done on drawing me into your words, Harmony. Be safe. I have to tell myself to slow down. 😂❤️

Diana Peach

This gave me chills, Harmony. Loved the power of this and the resolve at the end. Phew. Well done.